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*Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. *Why might this be the case? *What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Self-employment has been on the rise recently and it is heading towards the direction of becoming a norm, rather than
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work
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 in a company. So why is
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 the case and what are the potential downsides of being self-employed?
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, working under an organisation would mean less flexibility in terms of working hours as employees are required to adhere to rules and regulations strictly. To be exact, the younger generation of the workforce
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 to have more freedom during
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 and choose their own hours of
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 that, it provides them
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 opportunity to
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 wherever they want, and not solely restricted
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 the office. Not working under a firm
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 provides space for more self-exploration and at the same time
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 people to seek and explore
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their preferred industries.
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, there are disadvantages
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 being self-employed.
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, the job security of self-employment is significantly lesser than being employed
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 a company.
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, stress is
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commonplace
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 being self-employed as monthly income might differ each month and
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 would in turn lead to an uncertain future.
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, getting hired by a company would mean a more secure job and the future would be more predictable and calculated.
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 being self-employed might sound like a wonderful option, especially for those who do not like to
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 in the same environment and
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 with recurring job scopes over time.
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, there are downsides to working independently and one should learn to ponder carefully
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the pros and cons before jumping into a decision hastily.
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