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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

it is true that more and more companies have the tendency
of
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packaging
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 their
food
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 and
drink
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 products in
plastic
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containers
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. personally, I hold the belief that the advantages of
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 development are overshadowed by its disadvantages. on the one hand, the potential benefits of
plastic
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 packaging in
food
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 and
drink
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 need to be taken into consideration. it is worth mentioning that the provision of
plastic
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containers
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 has assisted consumers
to save
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 a huge amount of money
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ít
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the
 appropriate prices.
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, a myriad of
food
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 and
drink
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 manufacturers utilize
plastic
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 to wrap up their products, which is able to attract the attention of consumers.
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, in
supermarket
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,
food
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 and
drink
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is
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are
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 often packaged in
plastic
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containers
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 in order to ensure their freshness
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 appeal to shoppers with their incredibly low prices.
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, I strongly believe that
plastic
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 packaging has exerted certain negative impacts on the environment.
plastic
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containers
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 decompose relatively slowly and it is impossible for people to recycle them for other purposes.
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, these things will be thrown away at the landfill, which can lead to the problem of pollution.
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,
plastic
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 is known to melt and release toxic compounds when heated, so it can affect adversely people's
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 well-being.
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, the rates of cancer patients increase dramatically these days because of the excessive number of
plastic
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containers
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 they use. in conclusion, I am of the opinion that the merits of
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 trend are eclipsed by its demerits.
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, it is advisable for companies to utilize
plastic
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 to package their
food
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 and
drink
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 goods only when necessary.

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task response
Ensure that each paragraph fully explores the advantages and disadvantages of plastic packaging in food and drink. Provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of ideas within paragraphs by using transition words and phrases. Also, make sure that your introduction and conclusion effectively introduce and summarize the points you will discuss.
task response
Clear explanation of both the advantages and disadvantages of plastic packaging
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Effective use of examples to illustrate points
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