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some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same openion as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who some time disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own openion.

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Choosing a
friend
 is a challenging task . It is commonly agreed by some people that it is preferable to select
friends
 who will always have identical opinions as them. Others feel that it is much better to find
friends
 who often have an opposite opinion. In
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 I will discuss these
both
 views, and I will explain, why in my opinion it is always better to combine
both
 types of
friends
 in your circle of
friends
. Having a
friend
 with the same taste in different fields of interest,
such
 as food, fashion, hobbies, or lifestyle, will help to develop a type of relationship
that is
 unique and rare, which
both
 sides can enjoy and find a safe place without arguments, as the saying goes: "Great minds think alike". for ,example teenagers will have a better connection, with a
friend
, that thinks like them, and they will easily share their deepest secrets with someone they can relate to, rather than someone who disagrees with them and they are having a lot of conflicts
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. But
on the contrary
, it has been said in the past, that opposites are attracted to each other, and I agree with it. I believe that
friends
 who don't think always alike can contribute to themself enormously, than people who share the same thoughts. Having a wide range of opinions helps
friends
 to learn how to be
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 others, and
also
 enriches the knowledge of
both
 sides. People who work in a team, do not always agree with each other points of view, it is common to
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 among the team members a brainstorming - a discussion that helps to increase the level of creativity, or problem-solving,
for instance
, but
also
, brainstorming helps to
expouse
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expose
 other team members to diverse ways of thinking, or even different ideas without being disrespectful to one another. In conclusion, it is known that socializing and creating
friends
 is a work of art. Finding a good
friend
 is often complicated, especially in a world that communicating is usually done behind screens. I deeply believe that it is important to combine a
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friends
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 since it can only contribute to a person's social development.
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