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Band 4.5

some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who some time disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Friends
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 are very important for any relationship indeed, and they play a very crucial role in individuals' growth as well
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although
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 having different opinions
some
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. Some
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 people think it is always better to choose
friends
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having
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who have
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 the same opinion.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and conclude with my opinion
at the end
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.
To begin
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 with, some public believe that it is always
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 to select
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people
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 who have the same kind of mentality
indeed
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, due
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due to
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 they will not have any conflicts during any conversation
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 only belongs to their opinions
but
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also
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belongs to
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about
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 anything in their life as well.
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, The New York Times published an article that unveils that 60 per cent of the crowd across the world want to make buddies
,
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apply
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 who
got
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have
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 the same intellectual stamina
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 fact.
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,
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 has been proven that
although
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 the same opinions of communities may have constraints in their intellectual capabilities, but it is good for their relationship longer.
On the other hand
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, others will
also
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 ascertain that it is always best to have
friends
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 who
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different thoughts in order to get the best advice from them.
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, it is
also
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 important for the folks who will hamper some activities which may not
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 to perform and those that are very close to us, and that does not mean that person is an enemy
for
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to
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 us.
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, any
firm
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firm's
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 board of directors have different kinds of public who may occupy several positions
and
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, and
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 sometimes they may oppose proposals which will backfire on the company, and those will be considered as a think
tanker
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 and will disagree with the director's agenda sometimes.
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, they may be considered well-wishers
due to
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 their thoughts, which will lead to positive results for the
organization
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 eventually. To
summarize
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, after having a thorough discussion of the above, it has been an individual's decision to make
friends
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 in order to maintain the relationship
indeed
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and
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, and
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 it is always the best option to choose a wise member in our
companion
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companionship
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 to achieve positive results in our life
in
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, in
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 my opinion.

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structure
Plan first. Make a short plan with what you will say in each part.
cohesion
Have one idea in each para. Use simple link words to show the flow.
task
Make your view clear in one place and keep to the task. Give a clear opinion at the end.
language
Use only easy words. Check grammar and spelling.
purpose
The essay tries to cover both views and states an opinion at the end.
content
Some real examples are used.
length
The length is good and they keep topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Homogeneity
  • Conflicting opinions
  • Alliance
  • Open-mindedness
  • Foster personal growth
  • Constructive disagreement
  • Friction
  • Strain relationships
  • Echo chamber
  • Confirmation bias
  • Critical thinking
  • Superficial matters
  • Fundamental ethical differences
  • Enriching
  • Diverse social circle
  • Well-rounded life experience
  • Core values
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