The charts below show the Internet use in different perposes in Australia in 2010,2011 and the percentage by users .Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The charts below  show the Internet use in different perposes in Australia in 2010,2011 and the percentage by users .Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features  and make comparison where relevant
The bar charts illustrate the various targets of
Internet
users in Australia between 2010 and 2011. It is noticeable that most Australians used the
Internet
to send and receive emails in 2010 and 2011.
In addition
, the percentages based on the user's age of paying bills online and
social
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on social
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media are the same. It can be seen that the number of people who suffered from the
Internet
and
send
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emails peaked at about 70%. Meanwhile, the demand to use social media and online payment is less popular, at only about 49% and 50% respectively. For an
age based
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percentage, almost all users aged 18 to 25 surf
Internet
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for social media,
while
people aged around 65 use less, only 30%.
In contrast
, about 80% of browsers 65 years old
to
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apply
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pay their bills online or
to
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apply
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send emails.
In addition
, the proportion of people
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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40 to 60
year
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years
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olds
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old
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who browse the
Internet
for three purposes,
approximately
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is approximately
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71% to 77%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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