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nformation technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benifits of IT outweigh the disadvantages.

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I agree with the fact that information and Technology are changing many aspects of our lives and now dominate our home, leisure and work activities. Technology in recent times has developed so much that it has made human life much easier than we think . I think IT has more benefits than disadvantages It has many benefits which include completing any task or working from home with ease. In today's ,time one can book tickets or even solve a question at home and that too with speed.
This
 revolution has changed our lives and has made it easy for humans. It
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 helps reduce cybercrime as it is one of the main concerns of people. The ultimate objective of IT is that it helps people save time . With the help of ,IT we can connect other people from any part of the world which helps us in smooth communication The disadvantages of IT I can think of are, IT can cause some health problems as it involves a lot of screen time. ,
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 IT might
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 cause unemployment as if IT services increase technology will
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 increase which will lead to unemployment
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, I would say the benefits of IT outweigh more than the disadvantages. IT services if developed
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 will make human being's lives much easier and
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 world will be a better place.
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