The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting main features and make comparison where relevant
The bar charts illustrate information about four different destinations of graduate and postgraduate students after leaving college in the United Kingdom in 2008.
Overall
, it is noticaeble
that Correct your spelling
noticeable
further
study was the most common destination for graduate and postgraduate students (excluding full-time work
).
It is clear from the bar charts that the smallest number of students from both groups chose the
voluntary Correct article usage
apply
work
, 345 graduates
and 3500 postgraduates. The further
study destination calculated the highest number of graduates
and postgraduates, 29665 people
and 2725 people
respectively.
Moreover
, the variety of graduates
who decided to find a part-time job (17737 people
) was almost qual
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equal
with
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to
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
graduates
who were unemployment
(16237 Replace the word
unemployed
people
). Nevertheless
, the numbers for postgraduates who had a
part-time Correct article usage
apply
work
after leaving college was
much higher than for those who were Correct subject-verb agreement
were
unemployment
, 2535 Replace the word
unemployed
people
and 1625 people
respectively.
To sum up
, the less common destination was the
voluntary Correct article usage
apply
work
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