The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The chart reveals the proportion of
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physical activity among
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and
male
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in six
age
categories in Australia in 2010. Generally speaking, almost half of
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people did exercises regularly during 2010. Australian
women
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45 to 54 showed the highest level of physical activity,
while
men
in the
age
group 35-44 illustrated the least rate. The youngest
age
category (15 to 24) was the only one in which
men
did more exercises than
women
, almost 53% compared to 47,7%.
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women
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men
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between 25 and 34 years old. It should be noted that
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of females (52,5%) 35-44 years of
age
showed the biggest difference in comparison with males (39,5%), by 13%. The figures for the
age
groups of 45-54 and 55-64 were quite similar, for
women
it was around 53%,
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men
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group was 43,1% and for
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one was just over 45%.
Finally
, the percentages of active Australian
men
and
women
in the oldest section (65 and over) were almost identical, at approximately 47%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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