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Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourages businesses to move the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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These days, the government encourages businesses to move to the cityside area because of increasing
traffic
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 jam
problems
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 and less space for housing. I partially agree with the statement because only the government can solve
traffic
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problems
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 in the city areas. If
a small and big businesses
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a small and big business
small and big businesses
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 will be in rural areas
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 it decrease
traffic
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problems
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.
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, if a
person
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 has any kind of medical emergency
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 it will be less chance of him to be stuck in
traffic
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 jams.
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, air
pollution
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 can decrease in cities because of minimum vehicles,
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 noise
pollution
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,
as well as
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 noise
pollution
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also
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 decline.
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, working
people
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 can get maximum free space of land to build houses and flats.
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 the advantages, there are some drawbacks that more fuel require to reach their places.
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, if a
person
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 has his factory in a rural area
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 he has to travel more every day to reach his location so the use of fuel will increase for
business
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 class
people
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.
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,
business
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 institutes far from a house can
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 time consuming to reach
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 it
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 enhances transportation costs.
According to
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 a recent, survey
people
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 can feel more fatigue when their businesses are very far from their homes and a
person
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 starts decreasing interest in his field so outcomes and thinking abilities will decline and it will affect his
business
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 and the nation's economy.
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, fewer
traffic
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problems
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 reduce air and noise
pollution
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 in the city areas and help
people
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 to reach their places as soon as possible.
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, it is difficult for a
person
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 to travel every day in the
business
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 field.
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