Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do they drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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, there are too many ways that
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can get
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or waste time
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being busy on something. But in most of the cases kinds of
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which are digitally visual have been established for entertainment. There are too many
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studios and companies in the
world
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. Most of them are located in North America and in Europe. They are Blizzard, Gameloft, Ubisoft, Rockstar,
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electronics
, and so many others are included. These companies make war, simulation,
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world
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games
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, and these types of
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are
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trended
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world wide
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.
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use to play these
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to enjoy their
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and spend their time alone. Companies and studios are planning to make online
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in order to have
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game
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purchases. Some
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can be more addictive,
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the
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cases
people
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can be irritated
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playing these
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.
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some
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the
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people
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do play only story
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to understand and enjoy the
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itself
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as watching the movie or TV series. There have been too many
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which have been banned in some
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countries
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rate and crime
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scenes
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that they have.
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there have been some
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groups
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of
people
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who
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hate video
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, they find
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as
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a waste of time. But in
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the social groups and
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
work together to make educative video
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for children to make a better future for them. Video
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are the best tool that
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been invented by the human to increase the thinking ability. I am a story
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player,
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and one
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of the first
thing
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things
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that I look for in those
games
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is
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the scenario
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itself. There is
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age restriction in every
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games
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. Japan is
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one of the
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country
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. There are too many anime
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in
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country. It depends on the system in each country
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do
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they use
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this
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tool to make
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a better
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future for themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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