The diagram below show the stages in the production of bricks.

The diagram below show the stages in the production of bricks.
The
strcture
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structure
below illustrates the
production
stages
of brick manufacturing.
Overall
, the
bricks
production
do consist of seven
stages
. In
this
essay, we can summarize the
production
for
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two
sperate
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separate
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types. From collecting raw clays from
earth
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to packaging and transporting the moulded
clay
for local hardware stores.
Firstly
, the
production
starts with a massive mechanical digger which digs
clay
from the earth. The
digged
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dug
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clay
process
to a roller
which
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consist
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of a metal grid to filter the pure
clay
from the
digged
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dug
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clay
dirt.
Then
, in the third
stage
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the
clay
is added with water and sand and
moulding
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the
mixuture
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mixture
to a brick moulder.
This
will be the first part of the
process
which
consist
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consists
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of three
stages
.
Secondly
, the moulded
bricks
will be placed in a drying oven to
strenghthen
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strengthen
the
bricks
.
Then
the
bricks
will be transferred to cooling chambers to be cooled up to
atleast
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at least
two to three days. The
bricks
will be
then
packed and
prepare
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for the delivery
process
where a transportation truck would taken to transport
to
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them to
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local hardware stores.
Overall
, the
process
only takes seven
stages
to complete a brick in the
production
process
which illustrates a simple manufacturing
process
of moulding
of
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bricks
and packaging it to be transported.
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