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many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education others claims that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the word of work . to what extent do you agree or disagree

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 a university study subject or
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professional experience
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profession
guarante
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employed
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derequisition
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 academic background
such
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surgeon
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certificated
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automative
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automotive
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woodcarving
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experiences
experience
are essentials to get them.
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consequently
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 company
do
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scensific Knoledge
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scientific knowledge
 of her/his
work
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employed
many of
experties
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expertise
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experience
, so
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professional
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progression
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highly
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backgriuon
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background
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please
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assumption
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lethally
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also
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experienced
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person
 have more chance to obtain good them, having investigation about the requirement will
helpful
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again
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job
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