The table shows data about the underground railway systems in six major cities with the date opened, kilometers of the route, and passenger numbers per year in millions.
The table above graphically shows statistics of six different cities' underground transportation systems. The data shows the opening date, how long is the route, and the
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the places London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles.
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, it can be seen and confirmed that the first three cities that created their underground transportation system, have the most passengers per year. Linking Words
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, even though Tokyo was the third train listed in the graph, Tokyo has the most passengers per year with a number of 1928 million users per year.
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London in 1863 and Paris in 1900, are the ones that come across the most kilometres, London travels 394 kilometres of route, and Paris 199 kilometres.
All in all, people use more Tokyo’s underground even though it was created many years after the European Unnecessary verb
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