According to some people, it would be better if industries are established in regions outside the urban area. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages.

More and more people are advocating for shifting of
industries
from the
city
area
to the outskirts of it since it is playing
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role in spreading pollution across the metro
area
. Relocating them to a remote place from the
city
has certain benefits
along with
few
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drawbacks. Both its pros and
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cons are explained in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, more and more
industries
are occupying space in metropolitan
area
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,
as
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a
result
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people are now finding
hard
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it hard
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to find a suitable place to live in a
city
.
Moreover
, they are forced to live near hazardous industrial
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area
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that
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is the primary reason for
detoriating
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deteriorating
health
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of many.
Furthermore
,
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is one
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most adversely affected
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owing to rapid industrialization. To
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,
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numbers
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of sparrows has reduced to its extinction in a decade
due to
heavy
industries
. Replacing
industries
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the periphery
area
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city
will certainly reduce pollution
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is the prominent reason for many diseases in cities. If the industry is established in
village
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more people
form
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the same village and
near by
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villages can get employment. It would be beneficial for the company itself as the cost of land outside
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is less as compared to
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the city
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area
and
as a result
their capital investment can be saved for another operation of
company
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the company
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.
For instance
, Tata
motors
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has
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purchased a huge piece of land
in
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the outskirts of Ahmedabad that has saved
their
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300 crores rupees which they invested in
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of
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freshers.
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conclusion,
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,
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industrial revolution has made our life
simplier
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simpler
than ever, there have been
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consequences
such
as
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greenhouse
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effect that cannot be ignored.relocating companies from the
city
place to a village is not only beneficial for
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human beings but
also
for the whole ecosystem.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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