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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six years of the world.

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six years of the world.
the given charts reveal the percentage of using
water
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 for various aims (industrial, agricultural and domestic adoption) in six different part of the world, namely: North and South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central Asia and South Asia. It goes without saying that there is a trivial difference between these areas. for example, in North
America
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 and Europe the most rate of
use
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 refers to industrial
usage
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whereas
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 ,in other parts, the most percentage refers to agricultural
usage
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. the former,the agricultural
usage
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 is less than industrial
usage
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 with the same domestic
usage
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. Even though the latter, the agricultural
use
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 of
water
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 is considerably more than domestic and industrial
use
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. In these parts (South
America
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, Africa, centra;l and Southeast Asia), there is a trivial difference between industrial and domestic
use
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 of
water
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however
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 in North
America
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 and Europe, there is remarkable diversity between the percentage of industrial and domestic
use
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 of
water
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, use, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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