The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph represents the total market that has closed and the total shops that opened in a particular country between 2011 and 2018.
In 2011 the number of people that opened shops in the country that year is more than 8,000people
while
 those that closed theirshops are more than 6000people,which means there is at least 20
% gap between the opening and the closure of the shop Correct article usage
a 20
which
the rate of the opening is higher than that of closure.
In the year 2012,there has been a drastic reduction in the number of those that Correct pronoun usage
apply
are
opening the shop maybe by 50% from the year 2011 and Unnecessary verb
apply
also
 for the closure there has been like 2% of the people who have closed down theirshops.
In the year 2013, the rise in the
opening of the boutique by 10% from 2012-2013Also with the termination Correct article usage
apply
their
is an increase in the rate of Replace the word
there
public
 that closed the emporium by Add an article
the public
also
 10% which means the higher the opening the higher the closing in the year 2013.
In the year 2014,both the stoppage and the opening are just different by 1%, which means there is an increase in the opening of the supermarket and a decrease in the closing of the boutique.
In the year 2015,there was also
a fall in the number of populations that opened stand
 but not as much as those that closed down the supermarket.
In the year 2016,there is an increase in the termination of the market and there is neither a hike in the opening of the market nor the same goes for 2017also.
In summary,in moment 2011,2013,2014,there has been Fix the agreement mistake
stands
increased
 in the opening of showroomsReplace the word
increase
while
 in year 2011,2013,2018,there is an increase inclosing of the showroom in
the year 2014 there has been Correct your spelling
In
also
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