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The most crucial factor of a person ‘s life is his or her time at the workplace and life becomes meaningless when there is no job satisfaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It can be seen that in today's time
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satisfied job,
also
 plays an important role in one's carrier. I
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 with the statement that everyone must have a calming and relaxing workplace.
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, about various reasons that
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 in favour of the given
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scenario
. To commence with, a working area is the one an individual spends most of his time. in relation, if the working atmosphere would be calm and friendly
then
 it would definitely lead to good mental status. To illustrate, if a person is performing with creative
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collegues
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colleagues
 without any conflict,
then
 certainly
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 ambience for an individual.
For instance
, a recent survey , in 2022, declared that about 80% of workers were suffering from depression owing to
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poor team management , which was specifically about staff
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performance
. To add to it, if the work management would be able to provide better working experience to the staff.
Then
 obviously, there would be less burden on staff and
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reduce the hefty
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 among them.
Moreover
, the
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 free and relaxed and
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 mind is
also
 helpful not only for better performance but
also
 for enhancement of
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productivity at work.
For example
, it has been found by a company that workers who were free of
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stress
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 best in the production and development of business.
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 conclude, it can be said that there must be a relaxing job for each and every individual. It could be fruitful for both the company
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 who is working there.
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