The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
The Pie Charts reveal data on
water
consumption
across two different cities in comparison to the world.
Overall
, globally
water
is used mostly in agriculture
whereas
San
Diego
County
and California's
consumption
of
water
is mostly domestic. Looking into more details,
San
Diego
County
residents mainly use
water
for domestic needs at 60% of the
county's
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total
consumption
of
water
.
According to
the pie chart, 23% of
water
is being used in industries, the remaining 17% is consumed in agriculture.
On the other hand
, California's Usage of
water
is relatively similar across the 3 different sectors. About 39% of
water
is being used for residential reasons, making it almost 20% lower than the
consumption
of
San
Diego
County
Residents. Coming in second is the consumed amount of
water
in industrial sectors, Reaching 33%. ,
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agricultural
water
usage Is reported as the lowest percentage at 28%.
However
, worldwide
consumption
of
water
is mainly in the agricultural field which is the opposite of the
consumption
patterns in the two cities.,
Similarly
residential use of
water
is significantly lower than in both
San
Diego
County
and California
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  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
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  • practices
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