The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
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The Pie Charts reveal data on
water
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consumption
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across two different cities in comparison to the world.
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, globally
water
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is used mostly in agriculture
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San
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Diego
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County
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and California's
consumption
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of
water
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is mostly domestic. Looking into more details,
San
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Diego
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County
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residents mainly use
water
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for domestic needs at 60% of the
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county's
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total
consumption
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of
water
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.
According to
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the pie chart, 23% of
water
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is being used in industries, the remaining 17% is consumed in agriculture.
On the other hand
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, California's Usage of
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is relatively similar across the 3 different sectors. About 39% of
water
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is being used for residential reasons, making it almost 20% lower than the
consumption
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of
San
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Diego
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County
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Residents. Coming in second is the consumed amount of
water
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in industrial sectors, Reaching 33%. ,
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agricultural
water
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usage Is reported as the lowest percentage at 28%.
However
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, worldwide
consumption
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of
water
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is mainly in the agricultural field which is the opposite of the
consumption
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patterns in the two cities.,
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residential use of
water
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is significantly lower than in both
San
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Diego
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County
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and California
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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