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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both the advantages of each method and give your own opinion.

#people #children #home #child’s #development #school #method
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child's
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a child's
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 development, many people
believes
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 that children
is
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 better to learn at home but some people
thinks
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think
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 that it is still necessary to go to
school
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. Both
situation
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 have cons to
guide
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 the progress of
child's
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a child's
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 growth
amd
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and
these-two
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these two
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 sides can still support a young one.
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, the advantage of home-schooling gives
opportunity
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 for children to learn by themselves because they are curious about all
the
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things and they can have their own space.
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, the parents can assist them
for
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with
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 every
questions
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 they want to ask and things they want to learn. It is a combined
ideas
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 from a parent and a child to create ideas to gain knowledge.
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 the importance of going to
school
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are
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, they will learn to socialize to build up confidence.
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 getting
a
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the
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 help of
proffesional
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professional
teacher
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teachers
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 to monitor their performance by giving them activities,
quizes
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quizzes
, and
assignment
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assignments
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 to know what
the
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 strength and
weeknesess
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weaknesses
weakness
.
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are.
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, recognizing their work at
school
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 by awarding and giving medals will make them motivated more to study at
school
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. In my opinion, going to
school
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 is much better than learning at home because it is more limitless and children can explore more with plenty of books and computers that
provided
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. It is
also
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 the training
of
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them for the real world to know what
is
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the best career will have in the future. In
this
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direction
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 they will experience the different lessons and understand the value of life. To end, the kids should
have
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a participation in
face to face
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 classes with others because
in
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this
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 way, they can practice
them selves
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themselves
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 for being independent as long
as
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with the guidance of parents.
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, Having a presence at
school
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 is more likely to have a friend that can support and make memories.
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