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You have trouble paying rent for the house where you live. Write a letter to your landlord explaining your current financial situation and ask for a house change.

#trouble #rent #house #landlord #situation #change
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Mr.
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Mr
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 Amandeep Singh, I hope you and your family be fine. I am writing
this
 letter because of some reasons.
Last
 week, my mother
fallen
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fell
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 from stairs and she had a big
fractured
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fracture
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 on
arm
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her arm
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 and leg. She has
hospital
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a hospital
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 right now and his condition is not good , and I spent
a
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apply
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approxiametly
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approximately
 20,000 dollars . One thing is that company fired me because I did not
told
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tell
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 about leaves and I take 1
weeks
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week's
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holidays
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holiday
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, my situation is
beneath
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under
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 stress . I have no idea what I do for
living
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a living
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 . I have no money for food
as well as
 paying rent. I am facing hardship and it is a very difficult time for me . No one help me I am not ready to leave
this
 house, but I have no opportunity. I am not able to pay rent so I want to change
this
 house and next month will be our
last
 month. I hope you and your family understand my situation .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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