The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
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The graphs elucidate the number of participants
with
different genders in four different evening courses in 2009 respectively, Change preposition
of
along with
it, the proportion in various age groups.
Overall
, there were more female students in the evening education centre, only in the class of sculpture that male participants surpassed those females. Moreover
, learners mainly consisted of people over 50 years old, while
young individuals took up a small proportion.
First of all, the language course was the most popular among females, at 40 people, which was 2 times more than the male
ones, Fix the agreement mistake
males
while
the painting was the most favoured by men at 20 students. Furthermore
, the ratio between men and women in drama class was 1 to 2. On the other hand
, the least favoured course was sculpture consisting of more men than women.
As for the age of students, those who were over 50 years old took up the largest proportion at 42%, compared to those young people under 20 years old, who only accounted for 5%.Submitted by unapoya0916 on
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