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Some people believe these days teenagers are spending their leisure time at shopping centers instead of doing organized activities as sports or music . Do you think it has a negative or positive development?

#people #teenagers #leisure #time #centers #activities #sports #music #development
As we know,
the
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art
 isn’t only about pictures in
gallery
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,
movie
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movies
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 in
cinema
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 and
sculpture
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 in the square. Of course,
the
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art
 is
earnest
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 deal, which the greatest artist and architects,
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and craftsman
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craftsman
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 create. But now it finds
the
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 new way and it uses almost everyone, who
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want
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.
In other words
, I talk about
art
therapy
. It is
understated
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 current, which can help
people
 with emotional and physical conditions.
For example
, the
therapy
 was encouraged
in
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pandemic
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 period, when
people
 lost their meeting face to face and felt loneliness.
Art
therapy
 assumes that person can impress his feelings on
the
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paper or do something like sculpture.
According to
scientist
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researches
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, it helps
people
 to decrease emotional
destroys
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 and depression.
Also
,
this
 method is
practiced
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 for
people
 with different diseases like cancer. As for disadvantages,
the
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art
therapy
 can’t help everyone.
The
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 talk about
people
, who knows that they have some skills or
talented
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. They want to reach some ideal result and it isn’t about their inner feelings.
On the other hand
, the
therapy
 may cause reversed emotions, like unpleasure remembers or painful memories and it becomes the evocative harrowing
art
. In conclusion, I would say that every
therapy
 has disadvantages and can’t fit
for
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all
people
.
Art
therapy
more
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 unharmful and everyone can practice it everywhere and do it by
yourself
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themselves
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.
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