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Should education and health care services free of charge and funded by government, or should it be responsibilities of the people to pay for this service?

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Education
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 and healthcare should be funded by the
government
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 as these are basic human needs and as
people
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 have paid taxes to the
government
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, it is believed that they should be provided with free healthcare
services
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 and quality
education
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.
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, basic human needs are things essential for living in which good health care
services
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 and quality
education
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 are part. We lived in a society where parents find it difficult to Carter for their child's
education
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due to
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 poverty either low income or unemployment which brings about negative effects on their children. If the
government
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 can give free or subsidized
education
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, it will go a long way to make life better and easier for
people
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.
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, the lack of accessibility to good healthcare
services
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 has increased mortality and morbidity rate in society.
Government
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 can as well provide free or subsidized health care
services
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 which will give the masses access to the
services
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 bringing about a reduction in both mortality and morbidity rate.
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,
People
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 paid taxes to the
government
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 and it is believed that they should be provided with social amenities like schools, hospitals, good roads, recreation
centers
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, electricity, good water supply, etc. These will make life better and safer for them. If the masses can be faithful enough to
fulfill
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 their part of the obligation, it is expected of the
government
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 to do the same. In conclusion, the
government
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 should place
education
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 and health care a high priority to make life better, easier, and safer for
people
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.
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