Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?”
debts
have become a serious problem among some people
. the increasing number of people
who take loans
to fill their wants by buying things
they don't need and won't able to pay for. this
essay
will present the causes behind this
manner including aiming for people
to have fancy life
and also
mimicking celebrities
. this
essay
will suggest solutions to maintain this
problem including the role of government and increase the awareness of people
nowadays, people
are willing to have a fancy life
by buying expensive houses in addition
they are aiming to copy celebrities
' life
by buying unaffordable clothes they don't even need them. because some people
are possessed by showing off in front of their friends, they burden themselves by getting into debt
. for example
, many people
from the middle class take loans
from banks
with huge interest to just buy a fancy house and unwanted things
which leads to spending their life
either paying off their debts
or ending up in jail as they are not able to pay back their loans
. To sum up
, taking debts
to just purchase things
that are needed is a big issue.
Would increasing awareness of people
help? if they were money
management tv programs, ppl would make up their mind properly before they get into debt
to just mimic beloved celebrities
' styles . ,,
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banks
should investigate before allowing ppl to take loans
and put criteria to identify who needs debts
to buy a house. for ,example some banks
require their customers to fill out a paper to show what required debts
and then
make a decision whether to give them loans
or not. to sum ,up the more increasing ppl's awareness of their money
the less debt
will be given to them and also
banks
have to make sure they land the right people
.
in conclusion, getting into debtdebts
because of purchasing wanted Correct your spelling
debt debt
things
that are hard to be affordable is a big issue. this
essay
presented that having rich life
and buying mimic celebrities
' life
leads to having debt
problems. this
essay
suggested solutions to maintain the problem, teach people
how to manage their money
and also
banks
should make the right decision before land people
's money
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