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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 more and more important, there is an ongoing debate about
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subjects
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subjects'
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 importance, some
people
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 believe
History
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 is the most important subject
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 others
favor
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 Science and
Technology
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 more. In my opinion, both
subjects
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 are beneficial to strengthen personal ability. On the one hand, learning
History
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 can increase our knowledge about how modern society forms. Mordern civilization stems from
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 of
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history
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historical
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 events
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 as
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the second
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second
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industry
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 revolution which significantly impact the process of the formation of
mordern
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modern
 society.
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,
people
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 will have more thoughts and feelings by visiting those heritages or scenery sites, their lives will become more
meanful
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meaningful
.
On the other hand
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, students
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from
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 Science and
Technology
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 are more likely to find
high paying
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 jobs, because
technology
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 industries
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 as App development or Artificial Intelligence are very popular currently,
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 the prosperous needs of relevant talents in the job market pushed up the industry average salary.
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,
History
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 students can usually only find ordinary jobs. In my opinion, learning
History
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 is beneficial for
people
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 to appreciate heritages or famous spots from their life,
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study
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 Science and
Technology
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 has
advantages
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the advantages
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 to find a high wages jobs.
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 fore both
subjects
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 have
positive
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a positive
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 impact on enhancing
people
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's quality of life. In conclusion, in regard to which subject is more important, I consider it totally depends on personal interests. In my view, both
subjects
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 are important because they can enrich life experience a lot,
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 long as
people
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 are interested in it, they can find happiness in
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 field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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