Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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more and more important, there is an ongoing debate about
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subjects'
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importance, some
people
believe
History
is the most important subject
while
others
favor
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Science and
Technology
more. In my opinion, both
subjects
are beneficial to strengthen personal ability. On the one hand, learning
History
can increase our knowledge about how modern society forms. Mordern civilization stems from
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of
history
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events
such
as
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the second
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second
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industry
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revolution which significantly impact the process of the formation of
mordern
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modern
society.
Therefore
,
people
will have more thoughts and feelings by visiting those heritages or scenery sites, their lives will become more
meanful
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meaningful
.
On the other hand
, students
graduate
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from
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Science and
Technology
are more likely to find
high paying
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jobs, because
technology
industries
such
as App development or Artificial Intelligence are very popular currently,
thus
the prosperous needs of relevant talents in the job market pushed up the industry average salary.
By comparison
,
History
students can usually only find ordinary jobs. In my opinion, learning
History
is beneficial for
people
to appreciate heritages or famous spots from their life,
while
study
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Science and
Technology
has
advantages
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the advantages
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to find a high wages jobs.
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fore both
subjects
have
positive
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impact on enhancing
people
's quality of life. In conclusion, in regard to which subject is more important, I consider it totally depends on personal interests. In my view, both
subjects
are important because they can enrich life experience a lot,
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long as
people
are interested in it, they can find happiness in
this
field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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