The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the

salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram
indicate
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the
life
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cycle of a species of Large fish called the salmon, and how their
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life
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during the vita. We can recognize
of
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diagram
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the diagram
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information that their
life
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are three
section
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sections
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.
First
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part is
fry
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,
second
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sector is smolt and the
last
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is adult Salmon.  At
first,
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fry
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born
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in the vicinity of reeds and small stones.
In
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addition
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they display on
upper
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the upper
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river where the stream is calm and slow moving
then
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fries go to
lower
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the lower
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river where the flow is fast flowing
although
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living in
this
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place is about 4 years.
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smolts
Countinue
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Continue
their way to
opensea
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open sea
open-sea
and they are living there for five years.
Consequenty
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Consequently
adult Salmons will enter their cycle It means they will go to
first
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section of their
life
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.
As well as
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we have some evidence about their size it contain
fry
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is 3-8 cm
asmolt
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smolt
is 12-15cm. and adult salmon 70-75 cm.
According to
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this
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data
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the biggest size
in
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during their
life
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is
adultsalmon
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adult salmon
and the smallest size is
fry
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words life, fry with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • freshwater streams
  • small pebbles
  • reeds
  • alevin
  • yolk sac
  • nourishment
  • fry
  • grow stronger
  • grow larger
  • parr
  • defined markings
  • estuaries
  • smolt
  • adapt to saltwater
  • ocean
  • full size
  • sexual maturity
  • spawn
  • life cycle
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