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Some employers are giving more value on hiring people with good social skills apart from good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that social skills are just as crucial as good qualifications for success work?

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Nowadays, a certain amount of
employers
 are preferring labourers with considerable social
skills
besides
 their qualifications as they seek to hire their jobs. I mostly agree with
this
 suggestion because
employers
 do not want to harm their office or field
order
 by anti-social members and they want to utilize employee’s social
skills
 in many fields. First of all, anti-social or low social skilled workers may give bad effects
to
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company
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. They usually experience some problems in
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 process to work and these cases would result in
lost
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 for companies’ interests. In some cases, anti-social members of
company
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 can harm
coherence
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 of working,
thus
 other staff may lose their focus and sustainability
while
 they work.
For example
, in
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 sector,
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 assigned chiefs may sometimes have anti-social and
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have some communication problems with subs. These issues reflect
to
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work progress and some workers complain about their superiors.
Secondly
, in today’s business world, having social
skills
 take
considerable
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 place. Better communication and interaction influence companies’ profits significantly. Many companies from certain sectors need socially qualified
employee
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employees
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 to expand their business. To illustrate
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vary
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 of marketing sectors need socially skilled workers to welcome
theirs
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 clients and sell their products.
In addition
, these
employee
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employees
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 are needed by most of
companies
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the companies
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 in
order
 to
gratification
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the gratification
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 of consumers.
As a result
, it is common that
employers
 seek to social members to hire in their projects. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied in
order
 to explain better
this
 requirement.
Although
,
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 it is adequate to be technically qualified in some sectors
such
 as software, in my
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 many
employers
 are right to seek social
skills
 in their
recruitments
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due to
 ensure working
order
 and magnify their business. 52 dk
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