Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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, some people living close to where they were born, that
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is not good at all and almost the reason is based on the
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lot
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of advantages and disadvantages
about
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this
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Firstly
, the reason why they
living
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close to where they were born
because
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is because
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they do not want to out
from
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of
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the
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their
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comfort zone.
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,
a
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if a
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person
want
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to live near
by
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their
parents
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parent's
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home,
this
person
want
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to see and meet with their family every day. Another example is
this
person has a good job close to their living. These examples are the advantages when
the
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people living near their parents or where they
born
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.
Secondly
, there are lots of disadvantages when
this
people living close to where they were born. The first is they will not
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minded
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to the other, because
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is a good one when we want
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find out new experiences in our
life
. The second one is their
live
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will stuck at so so
situation
only, because if they
stuck
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are stuck
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in that
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only, their
life
is not colourful at all.
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last
one is they manage their
life
as
good
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as possible when they live close
with
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to
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their parents, because
of
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in our
life
we have to live by
our self
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ourselves
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, we have to manage everything
lonely
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alone
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. By those disadvantages we have to know about our
life
is social in
this
world. As the concluded, when we
born
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are born
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in
this
world we have to choose a good
life
by
do
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not living near
your
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our
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parent and
educate our self
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educating ourselves
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by
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with
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new experiences by gaining
it
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apply
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in
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apply
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new
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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