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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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The bar chart illustrated the amount of UK Bachelor’s degree enlistment and Master's degree admission who did not struggle
full-time
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for full-time
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 jobs after graduating in 2008.
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, it can be clearly seen that the sum of
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 studies is the highest for both types of recruitment and the smallest statistic is volunteer production.
This
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 paragraph will talk about graduate recruitment. The highest the sum is
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 study almost 30,000 folk and the second the figure is 17,735 for part-time struggle.
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was unemployment the the amount did not apart far from part-time jobs that much it was lower by around 1,500 crowds
thus
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 it is 16,235 nations.
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 lowest
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apply
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total is 3500 community which is for voluntary jobs. Let's move on to postgraduate admission from the UK in 2008. Start with
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 ,study 2,725 population are the highest destination as same as graduate admission. The part-time effort is 2,535. The amount of
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the
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apply
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statistic is apart from undergrad recruitment very far almost 7 times.
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The next
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 total for unemployment and voluntary effort which are 1,625
, 345
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and, 345
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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