The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
The bar chart illustrated the amount of UK Bachelor’s degree enlistment and Master's degree admission who did not struggle
full-time
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jobs after graduating in 2008.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the sum of
further
studies is the highest for both types of recruitment and the smallest statistic is volunteer production.
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paragraph will talk about graduate recruitment. The highest the sum is
further
study almost 30,000 folk and the second the figure is 17,735 for part-time struggle.
Next,
was unemployment the the amount did not apart far from part-time jobs that much it was lower by around 1,500 crowds
thus
it is 16,235 nations.
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lowest
the
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total is 3500 community which is for voluntary jobs. Let's move on to postgraduate admission from the UK in 2008. Start with
further
,study 2,725 population are the highest destination as same as graduate admission. The part-time effort is 2,535. The amount of
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the
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statistic is apart from undergrad recruitment very far almost 7 times.
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total for unemployment and voluntary effort which are 1,625
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and, 345
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respectively.
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  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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