The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1959 and 2008. Summarize the information and by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1959 and 2008. Summarize the information and by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the changes in working adults'
time
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on six different activities in some nations.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the percentage of working was the highest in both years,
while
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the travel to work was the lowest. There was a slight decrease in the rate of sleeping, and the same for going out with friends,
whereas
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an increase can be seen in the figures for working, relaxing at home,
traveling
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travelling
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to work, and playing sports. The amount of
time
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working adults spent working made up 33% in 1958, and
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then
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climbed to reach 42% in 2008.
Likewise
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, the change in travel to work was 2% in 1958, and
then
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it increased to reach 8% in the final year. The
time
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working adults spent sleeping was the second higher
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of spending
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in 1958, and
then
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it declined by nearly 7% a third of all
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spent in 2008.
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, the amount of
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spent going out with friends made up 19% in 1958, and it dropped to 6% in 2005,
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in terms of playing sports, it went up to reach 8% in 2005, compared to 1958, which was 6%. Regarding
time
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spent relaxing at home, it made up 8% in 1958, and
then
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it climbed by 5% in the final year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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