Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is acceptable for parents to use physical force to discipline their children. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Disciplining
children
is the linchpin part of parenting since it will shape their future
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. Using physical force as a way of dealing with discipline problems in
children
is deemed very controversial for all the hot buttons it pushes. Many parents rely on corporal
punishment
to some extent.
However
, I am of the honest opinion that hitting
children
is a demonic act, since it does not work at all and
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it may cause mental
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. Many parents argue that
children
often do not understand well
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what is right or wrong and just
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explaining with words is not enough because they are not enough mature to think clearly
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is told. In
this
instance, the most effective way to let them realize what they have done is
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them some corporal
punishment
so that they can remember the physical pain. The parents contend that
this
help prevent the
children
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do the same mistakes again and
also
the
children
think twice before any mistake.
However
,
this
may be true in some cases, but in most
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it does not actually work even if it appears so. Physical
punishment
may stop problematic
behavior
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, but
this
is because the child is afraid. In the long run, spanking will only make the child’s
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worse. The sad irony is that the more you give your
children
corporal
punishment
for their lack of self-control, the less they have. More importantly, corporal
punishment
alters
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children
’s brains. A 2009 study revealed that the kids who were frequently physically punished ( defined as at least once a month for more than three years) has
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matter
in particular
areas of the prefrontal cortex that have been associated with depression, addiction and other mental health disorders.
In addition
, the negative impact of corporal
punishment
is so colossal that its effect longs to the child’s adulthood. In pithy, the bottom line of my argument is that discipline is subject to
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how to behave. And umpteen studies show that physical
punishment
is ineffective at changing
behavior
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. And ironically, physical
punishment
teaches kids that aggression is an acceptable means of
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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