The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007
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The line graph demonstrates the utilization of 3 types of spreads
margarine
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, low fat & reduced spreads, and
butter
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from 1981 until 2007.
Overall
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, it can be clear to see that before 1996 low fat products did not have a role as much as the others, but the figure for
margarine
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and
butter
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is very high in 1981.
At the end
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of time have reduced till 2007. Focusing on
margarine
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and
butter
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statistics in 1981 is 88 and 141 respectively, but in 1986,
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,
margarine
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slightly lowed to 88,
butter
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raised to the highest point around 19 grams. In 1991 had rapidly decreased to 100
due to
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margarine
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increasing to the same level of 100,
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in 2007, both of them gradually declined to 50 for
butter
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and
margarine
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to 40 grams.
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, low fat & reduced spreads in 1996 had dramatic expansion from 10 to 80 in 1 year after 2000. In 2007 fell to approximately 10,
thus
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the sum of consumption for low fat & reduced spreads was 70
at the end
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of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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