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Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category 2002

Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category 2002
#percentage #consumer #expenditure #category
The table below compares some information about the average rates of spending on different items in five distinct
countries
 in 2002. It can be seen
Turkish
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that Turkish
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people
 had the most quantity of expenditure among the other
countries
 in using food and drinking
also
 tobacco afterwards,Irish
people
 had the second grade in
this
 category . The other
countries
 almost had the same level with 
slight
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 variant in utilization.
Nonetheless
, spending on the foregoing matters in Turkey dramatically
had
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increased , spending on clothing and
footwearing
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footwear
nearly
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and nearly
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 had the same operation as the other nations . Apart from that , about using clothes Italian
people
 took an advantage over the others. The grade about clothes shows the popularity of dressing among Italian
people
 in2002, About the topic of education and leisure ,we again see Turkish
people
outraned
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outraged
outranked
 other
countries
 and they had the most consumption . ,
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 Spain had the at least rank of using in
this
 topic. Sweden struck
the
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a
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 balance about spending on different items so its rates of consumption had no prominent gap over the others .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer expenditure
  • Economic health
  • Housing
  • Nutrition
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Leisure
  • Transportation
  • Spending patterns
  • Disposable income
  • Demographics
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial literacy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax rates
  • Recession
  • E-commerce
  • Sustainability
  • Budgeting
  • Cost of living
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