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In some countries, people are purchasing fewer new items and more second-hand goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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The shopping
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 is an inevitable part of our life. In some countries, people are purchasing fewer new
items
 and more second-hand goods.
This
 essay analyses the reason for the abovementioned trend and its negative impacts are explained in the following paragraph.
To begin
with
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 the reason for increasing
use
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the use
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 of
second -hand
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second-hand
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 product is that
firstly
, it helps
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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folks to save lots of money because
,
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 to
buying
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buy
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 a new item they need to spend
huge
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a huge
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 amount of cash.
This
 money can
uterlize
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utilize
 other activities.
For instance
,
a
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in a
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survey conducted in "Dubai" there are many shops for sale used goods most of the students buy these
items
 and
remaining
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the remaining
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 amount
used
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is used
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 for their education.
Moreover
, using of second - hand
items
 help to reduce the use and throw culture
it
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which
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 results to diminish the waste in
the
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apply
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society.
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, in "America " the government promote the used product sailing store
it
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which
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 results to reduce
E- waste
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E-waste
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 in their areas. There are some downsides
for
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to
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the
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apply
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using second - hand
produt
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product
 first and foremost one is that, it not only
affect
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affects
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the
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apply
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society but
also
,
affect
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affects
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 the entrepreneur because, the sales of new
items
 would reduce in the world so, it leads to unemployment and the business person
do
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does
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 not get profit.
In addition
,
the
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apply
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technology is advancing
day-by-day
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day by day
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 the engine of the used vehicle is older
one
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it
consume
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consumes
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 more fuel and the pollution rate is very high
compare
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compared
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 to new vehicles.
To sum up
,
although
 there are many
advantage
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advantages
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for
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to
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 using used
produts
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products
such
 as people can avoid
use
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using
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 and
throw
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throwing
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 culture and
reduce
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reducing
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 the E-waste, it
lead
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leads
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 to
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 unemployment rate and pollution in the world.
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