Some people say history is one of the most important subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Certain
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individuals
believe that lessons like
technology
and
science
are more prime than history lessons.
However
, others consider that history is
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of the number-one subjects.
While
the demand for
technology
and
science
evolves people will consider that
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kind of
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are
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more important.
In addition
, I believe that studying
this
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these
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subjects
are
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is
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more
crutial
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crucial
critical
. On
one
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hand, it is important to study history to
rememder
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remember
and know about the events that
happend
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happened
happen
in the past. To evolve and
develope
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develop
we need to think about the future, not about the past.
For instance
, thinking about all the things that
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done in previous decades,
centiries
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centuries
will not help us to create new things. It will only make us stuck on the achieved and will not allow
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us to
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grow.
On the other hand
, nowadays
science
and
technology
rule the world. Almost every third person in each
coutry
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country
is studying
this majors
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this major
these majors
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. They consider
this
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this subjet
these subjets
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subjets
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subjects
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more important since because of
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disciplines they can make future
developements
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developments
.
For example
, 10 years ago we could not imagine
about
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electro cars on the road,
however
, now it is part of our life.
Science
not only makes new discoveries but it
also
makes our
lifes
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lives
easier. In conclusion, I want to say that
currently
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technology
is moving the world towards
better
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a better
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future. The demand for scientists is getting bigger
evey
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every
year. Meaning to say,
science
and
technology
lessons are more supreme.
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