The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
The following graph illustrates the average
hours
of non-paid work
done per week
by married women
and men
in different ategories
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categories
such
as,
childcare, housework and gardening. The graph shows classifications Remove the comma
apply
such
as, without children
, with one to two children
and with more than three children
.
Overall
, the amout
of Correct your spelling
amount
hours
done by married man
is much lower compared to Fix the agreement mistake
men
women
. The most amount of hours
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spent
this
activities was done by married Correct determiner usage
these
women
with more than 3 children
. They spend up to 60 hours
a week
on such
activities. Meanwhile, men
in this
classification spend only 15 hours
per week
which is the least spend
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spent
hours
.
Married women
without children
work
30 hours
a week
when
Correct word choice
while
men
work
10 hour
less(20 Change to a plural noun
hours
hours
). In addition
, men
with one to two children
work
the same as men
withut
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without
children
. Meanwhile, women
work
almost 50 hours
per week
.
We can see the difference in time soend
by Correct your spelling
spent
women
and men
. Women
work
more hours
on unpaid activities, whilst men
spend less time on it
.Correct pronoun usage
them
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