Many corporations sell food and beverages which contain high sugar and can create many health problems. People suggest that the sugary products should be made more expensive so people can consume less sugar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is so interesting that today’s

people

are aware of the health of their

body

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, especially regarding the

sugar

level consumed

everyday

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. In today’s life, we can see the fact that almost all food and beverage

companies

are selling different types of

products

that consist of high levels of

sugar

in many ranges of

prices

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. Many

people

may think

this

would cause a health problem in the future and the best

way

is to decrease the demand by making the

products

more costly. In my opinion,

this

is not an effective

way

.

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essay shall highlight my opinion in the paragraphs below. In

this

era, many

people

are consuming

sugar

everyday

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. Most of them consume

sugar

as a habit or even become a daily need.

Moreover

, some psychology researchers believe that consuming

sugar

is the easiest

way

to gain some energy.

For example

, most

people

today will have a cup of

coffee

to start their activity but I believe they will put some

sugar

in it.

Then

, several

people

do not like to drink

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pure

coffee

or

a

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bitter one, so they choose

a

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coffee

with milk or caramel just to get the caffeine. Imagine how much

sugar

they have already consumed in the morning. Increasing the price of let’s say instant

coffee

will cause other problems, in

this

case, it could affect

people

’s productivity.

However

, when it becomes a routine or a dependency

of

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sweet things, I believe

people

will find a

way

to try to get them. In another perspective, increasing the price of

consumption

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products

will affect many businesses. Imagine if

this

method is working, it will reduce the demand

of

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food or beverages offered and will

also

decrease the ability of

companies

to get their revenues. If we can see,

for example

, in Indonesia, there are so many food and beverage

companies

which are becoming

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largest revenue stream

company

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companies

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and contribute to

support

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supporting

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the growth of the economy. When they are not able to sell their

products

, other issues will come. The worst is when the company experiences some loss and needs to cut off some of

their

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employees.

To sum up

, I would say there must be another

way

to tackle

this

problem. Selling a high price of sugared

products

will only affect

people

’s

behavior

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behaviour

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and give a disruptive impact

for

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some

companies

.