Many corporations sell food and beverages which contain high sugar and can create many health problems. People suggest that the sugary products should be made more expensive so people can consume less sugar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is so interesting that today’s
people
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are aware of the health of their
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, especially regarding the
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level consumed
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. In today’s life, we can see the fact that almost all food and beverage
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are selling different types of
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that consist of high levels of
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in many ranges of
prices
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. Many
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may think
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would cause a health problem in the future and the best
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is to decrease the demand by making the
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more costly. In my opinion,
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is not an effective
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.
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essay shall highlight my opinion in the paragraphs below. In
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era, many
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are consuming
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everyday
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. Most of them consume
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as a habit or even become a daily need.
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, some psychology researchers believe that consuming
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is the easiest
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to gain some energy.
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, most
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today will have a cup of
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to start their activity but I believe they will put some
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in it.
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, several
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do not like to drink
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pure
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or
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bitter one, so they choose
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coffee
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with milk or caramel just to get the caffeine. Imagine how much
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they have already consumed in the morning. Increasing the price of let’s say instant
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will cause other problems, in
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case, it could affect
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’s productivity.
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, when it becomes a routine or a dependency
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sweet things, I believe
people
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will find a
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to try to get them. In another perspective, increasing the price of
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products
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will affect many businesses. Imagine if
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method is working, it will reduce the demand
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food or beverages offered and will
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decrease the ability of
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to get their revenues. If we can see,
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, in Indonesia, there are so many food and beverage
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which are becoming
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largest revenue stream
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companies
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and contribute to
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the growth of the economy. When they are not able to sell their
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, other issues will come. The worst is when the company experiences some loss and needs to cut off some of
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employees.
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, I would say there must be another
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to tackle
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problem. Selling a high price of sugared
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will only affect
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’s
behavior
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and give a disruptive impact
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some
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.

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