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Many students around the world are not choosing science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What effects will this have on society?

#students #world #science #subjects #university #effects #society
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Around the world, lots of people do not want to learn
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, many parts of our environment need scientists.
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 can not develop continuously and all inventories will be stopped. In conclusion, studying
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perceived difficulty
  • abstract concepts
  • inadequate teaching methods
  • qualified science teachers
  • higher perceived income
  • job security
  • undervaluation of science careers
  • technological advancement
  • innovation
  • shortage of skilled professionals
  • critical fields
  • healthcare
  • engineering
  • environmental science
  • economic implications
  • reduced competitiveness
  • global market
  • problem-solving capabilities
  • critical thinking skills
  • workforce
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