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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others say housing facilitires should be build instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nature
 nowadays is considered as a secondary thing by some denizens , Handful amount of citizens suggest that empty spaces should be utilised for planting vegetation
whereas
 other part of society opines that the area should be used for residential purposes.Let us discuss both
the
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arguments followed by my opinion in the
ensuring
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 paragraphs.
To begin
 with , It is an irrefutable fact that
greenery
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 around us is an imperative factor
of
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in
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 our lives.
Nature
 around us is burgeoning the level of peace in our minds.
However
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 people tend to ignore
this
 fact and focus on materialism.To illustrate , there was an article published by 'The
tribune
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' , which stated that people living in metro cities are prone to upsurging health issues as they are lacking pure oxygen around.
On the contrary
 , Denizens in today's world are more likely
drown
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 by the fact of showcasing ,
therefore
 they love living in big bungalows except in
farm houses
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.To
clarity
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, There was a survey conducted by
National
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the National
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 Sample Survey Office (New Delhi) which stated that 100 out of 110 people are more into showing
of
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off
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 their lifestyles
instead
 of relishing
it
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them
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. In my opinion , Mankind should check
their
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 surroundings they live in and
also
 they should focus on planting more and more trees around.To throw some forth light , human beings need vegetation around them to keep
check
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 on their health,so they can take natural oxygen
instead
 of going under therapies.To
examplify
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exemplify
, Celebrities living in
top notch
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 metro cities are
under going
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undergoing
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mounting
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amount
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 of therapies to keep themselves healthy. To encapsulate,it can be reiterated that we all need
nature
 around us as
nature
 somewhere or the other ameliorates our lives.I would like
to conclude
 by saying that
nature
 never fails to astonish you , so we should all remain close to greener parts of society.
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