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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tabe shows how these causes affected three regions of the world the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tabe shows how these causes affected three regions of the world the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie chart
illustrate
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 information about the main causes of
agricultural
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the agricultural
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 field
become
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becoming
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 less
ptoductive
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productive
.
In addition
, the table
provide
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 data about how these problems affected three areas namely North
America
,
Europe
,
Oceania
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and Oceania
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along
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 the 1990s.
Overeall
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Overall
, there were three reasons that causes
of
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land degradation during the 1990s. The first was over-grazing (35%), followed by deforestation (30%) and over-cultivation (28%).
In addition
,
Europe
 was the major region that cause deforestation with
proportion
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9.8
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of 9.8
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%. The same trend
also
 happened in over-cultivation areas with slightly different
possition
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;
Europe
, North
America
,
Oceania
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and Oceania
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 with percentages
7.7
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%, 3.3%,
0
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and 0
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% respectively.
In contrast
, the highest region
cause
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caused
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 over-grazing was
Oceania
 with
percentage
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11.3
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%, followed by
Europe
 (5.5%), and the
last
 was North
America
 (1.5%). In conclusion, the first region that cause land degradation was
Europe
 ( 23%), followed by
Oceania
 and North
America
 (5%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, europe, oceania with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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