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Some people think that the strict punishments of driving offences are the key to reduce traffic accidents.Others however believe that other measures are more effective in improving road safety

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Nowadays some people think that strict
penalty
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 for driving offences are the key to reducing
traffic
accidents
.But others believe that other measures would be more effective in improving
road
 safety.In
this
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i
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 would like to put some lights
about
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this
 theme .I will try to give my opinion regarding the topic .
Firstly
,
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the
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many countries have
barrier
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about
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speed
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 of cars.The government think the speed of
car
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the car
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 should be right for the
road
.And
for
this
reason
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 they set
barrier
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barriers
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the
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 speed of
car
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cars
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for
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 each
road
.
For instance
 if
ride
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car
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a car
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 between houses the limit
of
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speed
50
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.But
on
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 big
ways
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 the speed limit does not have. But it has a negative side
for example
 if you drive a
car
in
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the
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high speed on an uneven
road
 you can
lost
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 control of
car
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the car
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.
In the
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 1989 experiment of the Social
media
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 university shows that
the
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in
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improving
road
 safety
do
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 not play
important
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an important
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 role
on
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a
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traffic
 accident.First of all the important role
on
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the
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traffic
accidents
 play the level of
driver
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the driver
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 and the speed of the
car
.If you break the rules of the speed in the streets the government give some penalty for driving.Many people think it is not
good
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a good
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 way to decrease
the
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traffic
accidents
.But statics do not completely approve
about
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this
. In the past when
first
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 punishment for
the
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driving offences
accepted
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a
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 number of
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traffic
accidents
 decreased to 35
percent
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. In
conclusion
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i
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I
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 think the punishment for driving offences
are
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 the key to
decrease
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traffic
accidents
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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