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The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts describe the proportions of three parts -
agriculture
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, manufacturing, and
business
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 and financial services - to the UK economy from 1900 to 2000.
Overall
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, the
rate
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 of
business
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 and
financial
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finances
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 dramatically rose,
while
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 there was a notable decline in the
agriculture
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 and manufacturing percentage.
To begin
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 with, the contribution of
business
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 and
financial
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finances
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 increased
steadly
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steadily
 from under 5% to over 30% by 2000
whereas
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 there was a continuous fall in
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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rate
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, where the proportion declined by about 30% compared to 1900. It is remarkable that the
business
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 and financial
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rate
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rates
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 exceeded between 1975 to 2000.
In addition
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, there was a sharp drop in the proportion
in
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of
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agriculture
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 during the period from 1950 to 1975, where the
rate
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 slumped by over 40%
although
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 the percentage slightly recovered in 1950.
Therefore
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, the
rate
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 of
agriculture
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 became under half of
manufactureing
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manufacturing
 at the point of 1975.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, business, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Declining trend
  • Agrarian economy
  • Fluctuations
  • Industrial advancements
  • Recessions
  • Significant growth
  • Service-oriented industries
  • Dynamic economic structure
  • Traditional sectors
  • Modern service-based sectors
  • Urbanization
  • Technological advancements
  • Global market integrations
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