The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts describe the proportions of three parts -
agriculture
, manufacturing, and business
and financial services - to the UK economy from 1900 to 2000. Overall
, the rate
of business
and financial
dramatically rose, Replace the word
finances
while
there was a notable decline in the agriculture
and manufacturing percentage.
To begin
with, the contribution of business
and financial
increased Replace the word
finances
steadly
from under 5% to over 30% by 2000 Correct your spelling
steadily
whereas
there was a continuous fall in manufacturing
Correct article usage
the manufacturing
rate
, where the proportion declined by about 30% compared to 1900. It is remarkable that the business
and financial rate
exceeded between 1975 to 2000.
Fix the agreement mistake
rates
In addition
, there was a sharp drop in the proportion in
Change preposition
of
agriculture
during the period from 1950 to 1975, where the rate
slumped by over 40% although
the percentage slightly recovered in 1950. Therefore
, the rate
of agriculture
became under half of manufactureing
at the point of 1975.Correct your spelling
manufacturing
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, business, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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