The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
The bar chart presented here offers in-depth information about the scale of men and lady who cleared their driving test in an Asian country in
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1980, 1990, 2000 and 2010.
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Overall
, the units are measured in percentage where the passing proportion of females is comparatively more in 2000,
than compared to Men in 2000 and 2010.
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Firstly
, on analysing said chart the women has
consistently cleared the driving test at about 48% in 1980, which slightly rose in 1990 Unnecessary verb
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around 52% and took a sudden hike in 2000 and reached around 68%, Change preposition
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Furthermore
after an increase in said passing rate there was a slight downfall at around 3% when compared to 2000.
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, the scale of Men is contrast
to that of Women Add an article
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a decline of 10%, in 1990 it reached 38%, in 2000 and 2010 the passing proportion is the same around 48%.Wrong verb form
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