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The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.
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The two pie chart
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 information
the
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 gadgets people in 18 to 25 years categories used between 2009 to 2019 in Canada.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 conventional
TV
 dramatically decreased in 2019
First,
The highest watching
rate
 was for conventional
tv
 and Laptop between 34%-20% in 2009.
In contrast
, in 2019 highest
percentage
 are Flat-screen
TV
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TVs
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 and Mobile
Phone
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 between almost
same
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rate
 of 27% and 26%.
Second,
The lowest watching
rate
 was for
Tablet
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 and Mobile
phone
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phones
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 between
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the rate
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rate
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rates
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 of 5% and 8%.
However
, in 2019 lowest
percentage
 is
Conventional
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TV
rate
 of 4%,
Furthermore
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tablet
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 dramatically raised to a
percentage
19
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of 19
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%
Third,
laptop
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laptops
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 gradually decreased from 20% to 12%
percentage
 between
in
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2009 to 2019 similar to desktop
computer
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computers
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 decreased
18
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by 18
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% to 12% In conclusion,
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behavior
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 of people in
18
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 to 25 age groups in 2009 prefer to
used
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 Conventional
TV
.
In
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 people in 2019 prefer to Flat-screen
Tv
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TVs
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 or Mobile phone.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, rate, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • gadgets
  • utilized
  • age categories
  • watching TV channels
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • notable trends
  • increase/decrease
  • devices
  • decade
  • advancements in technology
  • user preferences
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • conclusion
  • implications
  • technology and media companies
  • lifestyle
  • habits
  • target age group
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