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The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The graphs elucidate the changes being made in a student dormitory between 2010 and nowadays.
Overall
, there are more bedrooms
along with
 other new facilities,
moreover
, the building of accommodation underwent
expansion
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 to create more living areas.
On the other hand
, there are some facilities replaced for other uses. The garden beside the hallway 2010 is turned into car parking, and the
bedroom
at the end
 of the hallway against the main entrance experience a renovation to add an en-suite room. The
bedroom
 and bathroom close to the entrance remain unchanged, and so does the kitchen, only now it is
also
 being used as a social area. The
bedroom
 on the north side of the kitchen is the same as in 2010,
,
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however
, the living room beside it is been removed and renovated as a
bedroom
.
On the other hand
, the building is expanded between 2010 and nowadays, taking up part of the garden near the living room to make one more student
bedroom
 with two entrances, one of which is leading to the outside.
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