The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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The graph illustrates fluctuations in the population of individuals who
born
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were born
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inside the country and for
people
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who
born
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were born
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outside the country and living (urban, rural and town)in
Australia
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between 1995 and 2010.
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it is clear that
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the percentage of
people
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who live in cities both in and out of
Australia
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was the highest ,
while
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rural
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the rural
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area of
people
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who live in
Australia
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was the least.
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with, In 1995 the percentage of
people
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who were born in
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and lived in cities was about 50%, after which the number rose to 65% in 2010.
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, the proportion
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people
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of people
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living in towns experienced a decrease of 5% to 15% in 2010, which was the same figure as
people
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in the countryside after dropping twofold from 30% in 1950.
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people
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who were born outside of
Australia
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, city inhabitants reached
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peak of 80% in 2010 whilst the
people
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in towns remained stable. As for rural citizens,the figure plummeted from 40% in 1950 to approximately 5% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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