If all workers in a company were paid exact same wage regardless of job role there would be much more harmony and cooperation between staff. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Parents
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usually
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be violent to teach
children
to be disciplined.They find
the
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effective
way
to teach
discipline
to their
children
by
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through
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physical
punishment
.
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essay will discuss why Smacking
children
is
absolutly
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absolutely
not fine to teach them
discipline
. Physical
punishment
is supposed to be
best
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the best
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way
to teach
discipline
to
Children
this
physical
punishment
maker
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makes
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an impact on
children
's
mind
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minds
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to do what is being asked and how is being asked. For instant, if a Child does anything wrong
that is
not supposed to be done by him that may be unethical
of
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or
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any harmful act which is not bad or wrong for the child,
therefore
if
parent
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the parent
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scolds him
then
he will realize that he has done something wrong there. In
this
way
, physical
punishment
or to be harsh can be
useful
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way
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ways
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to let them the
dicipline
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discipline
.
On the other hand
,
the
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physical
punishment
can be
ineffective
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the ineffective
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way
in
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of
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raising
the
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children
, because
this
behavior may lead the
children
to be
aggresive
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aggressive
and
abbusive
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abusive
in return
to
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for
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the physical
punishment
and may betray their parents.
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, held by
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department of NED University of Social Sciences, Pakistan,
it
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was found that
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better and
effectively
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more effectively
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when they are treated with love and care, physical
punishment
and
being
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harsh can lead to bad impacts on
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behavior
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and their character.
Therefore
, Smacking the
children
can not be
good
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way
during raising to teach them
discipline
.
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essay discussed
that
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why physical
punishment
can not be supposed to be
effective
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an effective
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way
to teach
discipline
to
children
. In my opinion, physical
punishment
is not the best
way
to teach them
discipline
,
children
should be treated
by
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with
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care and love to raise them with good character and
behavior
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behaviour
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmony
  • cohesion
  • financial incentive
  • productivity
  • equity
  • organizational culture
  • highly skilled professionals
  • innovation and competitiveness
  • redistribution of tasks
  • job satisfaction
  • meritocracy
  • contributions and achievements
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