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Telecommuting refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology . Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades . How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting ?

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it is becomingly increasing common that a number of countries have begun to
use
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 telecommuting and it is expected that
this
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 way of working will be popular in the next decades.In my opinion , the fact that telecommuting brings more advantages than disadvantages Admittedly,it is true that telecommuting will bring some disadvantages
in
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 management.It
is seems
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 that employees will be more concentrate when they
working
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work
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 in the office.
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, when they
use
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the
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telecommuting refers to work at home ,they might
could
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not focus on their work because no managers can stop them
relaxing
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.Even so,
this
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 problem can be solved.Managers can
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 electronic devices like
monitor
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 to check whether employees are working hard or not
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，telecommuting refers have
good
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 effect on society and the
company
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.First of all, it can make society more environmentally friendly.The reason why many people do not need to commute is that they used the telecommuting refers.
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,less traffic reduces carbon emissions too.So ，
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 telecommuting is good for the social environment.The secondary factor we need to take into consideration is that telecommuting refers bring more possibilities to work.
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, some companies
use
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 it to communicate with foreign talents, not just local employees. By doing things,It makes a
company
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 more international and more
motivate
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. In conclusion,
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 sometimes telecommuting refers brings some drawbacks for the
company
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,it brings more benefits for the
company
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 and society.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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