some believe that the best way to keep fit to join a gym or health club while others think doing every activities such as walking and climbing stairs is as effecient. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Fitness of a body is one of
major
criteria to be followed by every individual, most of them accept as doing some physical activity Add an article
the major
on
our daily routine is quite enough rather than moving to Change preposition
in
gym
. Nowadays, Correct article usage
the gym
people
are depended on certain
Add an article
the certain
a certain
gadget
to complete their Fix the agreement mistake
gadgets
work
in
Change preposition
at
home
as well Add an article
the home
a home
at
Correct word choice
as at
workplace
. Add an article
the workplace
According to
me, to be healthy the gym is not mandatory in life.
At present, various technology has been developed especially the
electronic devices like household products which motivated everyone to do regular activities on Correct article usage
apply
it
. Earlier, Correct pronoun usage
them
a
fitness coaching centres were too hard to Correct article usage
apply
found
because almost every person had numerous activities in their houses where doing physically Wrong verb form
find
incase
Correct your spelling
in case
of
gardening, Change preposition
as
agricultural
, washing and others. Replace the word
agriculture
These
involvement was considered as an exercise so that there was no Change the determiner
This
any
secondary requirement for Correct quantifier usage
apply
Correct article usage
the management
management
Replace the word
managing
their
Change preposition
of their
health
. Hence
, special
class for Add an article
a special
health
maintenance not
required.
Generally, Add a missing verb
is not
people
are holding in busy schedules routineAdd the comma(s)
, therefore,
therefore
most of them in a family where overrding
on jobs. Correct your spelling
overriding
Instead
of doing by themselves all work
Correct article usage
the work
in house
finding Add a hyphen
in-house
a
support from machines. To wander from one place to another Remove the article
apply
eventhough
a small distance will check in 2 or Correct your spelling
even though
4 wheelers
. Add a hyphen
4-wheelers
Hence
, walking a
kind of body movement drastically reduced so that Add a missing verb
is a
people
extracting one hour to join
certain types of Change the verb form
joining
health
club
. If Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
people
understand and carry forward few
Correct article usage
a few
of
Change preposition
apply
work
physically then
there is no requirement of doing huge
Add an article
the huge
a huge
workout
. Fix the agreement mistake
workouts
Thus
, people
mentality will Change noun form
people's
decides
an opinion on Change the verb form
decide
statement
provided.
In conclusion, choosing Add an article
the statement
a statement
a
some kind of physical Remove the article
apply
work
will improve their health
and preferening
moving to a few Correct your spelling
preferencing
preferring
distance
by walk is far better than Change to a plural noun
distances
segregate
some time for Wrong verb form
segregating
to do
heavy workout in Change the verb form
doing
gym
.Add an article
the gym
a gym
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