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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure demonstrates how the generation of electricity in a hydroelectric
power
 station
differ
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 between day and night. The most noticeable difference between the hydroelectric
power
 station’s operation during day and night is the dam. The
flow
 of
water
also
differ
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 with regard to the
turbines
.
It is clear that
 the dam is open,
water
 gathered from
river
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the river
a river
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 in
high-level
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the high-level
a high-level
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reservoir
 to
flow
 down to the
reversibles
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reversible
turbines
 for operating the generation in
Power
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a Power
the Power
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 station.
By contrast
, the
water
 is
flow
 from
low level
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low-level
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reservoir
 and
pumped
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is pumped
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 through the reversible
turbines
.
Thus
, the
flow
 of
water
 is from
low-level
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a low-level
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reservoir
 to a high-level
reservoir
.
Furthermore
, the dam is closed,
which
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where
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 the intake of
water
 is stored.
Moreover
, the generator in the hydroelectric
power
 station
generate
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generates
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 electricity and
then
 through the
power
 lines and
finally
 into the national grid in the day.
Conversely
, the plant used to pump
water
 from
low-level
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a low-level
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reservoir
 to
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a high
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high level
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high-level
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reservoir
 in order to reverse
turbines
 for generating electricity at night.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, flow, water, turbines, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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